Can someone please give feedback on my 8 mark History question?

IGCSE Edexcel Germany: Development of dictatorship
Explain two effects on Germany of Nazi censorship. (8 marks)
One effect on Germany of Nazi censorship was the increase in indoctrinating propaganda that encouraged traditional Nazi ideals across Germany. This was because once the Nazi Party came to power, Hitler, alongside Goebbels, began implementing many forms of propaganda across the country. This was done by distributing many cheap radios amongst citizens so that Nazi broadcasts were accessible, producing films that had Nazi messages, the Nuremberg rallies to show Nazi power and using the image of Hitler in many paintings and posters. This enforcement of ideology brought about an increased exposure to traditional views of Aryan superiority, antisemitism, discrimination and sexism upon the people of Germany.
Another effect of Nazi censorship on Germany was the erasure and control of large churches. Whilst Hitler first agreed to the Catholic Church Concordat and promised to leave the church alone, the Nazis eventually broke this promise and Hitler shut down many church schools, priests were sent to concentration camps and the Catholic Youth League was broken up. This was because Hitler believed the Catholic Church was a threat to the Nazis because it encouraged ideas of peace and respect, the opposite of Nazi ideals. Hitler also formed a single Protestant Reich church which encouraged Aryan superiority. This idea of censoring and controlling traditional religious teachings allowed the Nazis to indoctrinate people into supporting their more violent and hateful actions, especially towards Jews and minority groups.

I saw that statistic on some videos too, but i researched into it and apparently its the opposite - 95% of people believed in God

i agree. really well written but for your first paragraph you could include the stat that 70% of German households owned a radio, for your second you could say that by the end of 1939, only 5% of the German population considered themselves religious. stats help show more factual knowledge and instantly makes your answer better

Ohh thank you, I never knew that statistics were important, my teacher never went over any of them. Where do you find all these stats?