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can someone PLZ mark my macbeth essay

hi can someone please give me a mark and grade so i know what im working at (this is not the whole essay just the thesis and first paragraph- i just want to know if im doing it correctly) rlly appreciate it if you do

How does shakespeare present lady macbeth's ambition? (extract is A1 s5)
Lady macbeth is a tragic character whos ruthless ambition and manipulation drvies the play's catastrophic events, but her subsequent and harrowing descent into guilt and madness highlights the psychological consequences of unchecked ambition and the inherent instability of usurped power. Perhaps, shakespeare uses this to serve as a warning against the sacriligeous act of regicide and disrupting the natural order.
Shakespeare depcits lady macbeth as a duplicitous and manipulative character who weaponises language and gender to dominate Macbeth and pursue her ambition. when lady macbeth receives a letter from macbeth, she immediately degrades macbeth's nature as being 'too full of the milk of human kindess'. this establishes a clear power imbalance in their relationship, in which lady macbeth controls macbeth's sense of dignity and aims to fuel his ambition. specifically, the metaphor of 'milk' symbolises nurtuing, generous and compassionate qualities which are evident in macbeth. Yet, lady macbeth perceives this natural compassion as a flaw which highlights her rejection of moral compassion in the pursuit of power. Alternatively, the milk could be alluding to milk from a woman's breasts, which further reinforces lady macbeth's emascualtion towards macbeth, fuellingboth her sense of ambition, as well as macbeth's . lady macbeth's subversion of traditional gender roles is seen as unusal and unsettling in the jacobean era and shakespeare may be presenting this reversal of traditional roles as the catalyst of ruthless ambition. However, Lady macbeth may alternatively be viewed as a supportive wife who merely aims to guide macbeth into accomplishing his aims, despite it being a path of destruction and tyranny.

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So far from what I can read it’s very good , but this essay needs more quotes also I’m gonna assume that on paper the first paragraph would be one big paragraph (not as massive as it is here) , but if it is maybe combine with another quote similar to your idea to up level your answer .
And basically you just really need more quotes , and also portray her character throughout the play , you wanna show how she changes throughout the play .

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Coming from a grade 8 student in English literature.

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by Chicken124
So far from what I can read it’s very good , but this essay needs more quotes also I’m gonna assume that on paper the first paragraph would be one big paragraph (not as massive as it is here) , but if it is maybe combine with another quote similar to your idea to up level your answer .
And basically you just really need more quotes , and also portray her character throughout the play , you wanna show how she changes throughout the play .

oh wait so this is just one paragraph and usually i analyse one quote per paragraph in detail... so is it not enough? if i was to write the whole essay i presume it would be about 4 paragraphs so 4 quotes that i would rip apart basically. also the first paragraph is just the thesis/intro
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by X4YN4B
hi can someone please give me a mark and grade so i know what im working at (this is not the whole essay just the thesis and first paragraph- i just want to know if im doing it correctly) rlly appreciate it if you do
How does shakespeare present lady macbeth's ambition? (extract is A1 s5)
Lady macbeth is a tragic character whos ruthless ambition and manipulation drvies the play's catastrophic events, but her subsequent and harrowing descent into guilt and madness highlights the psychological consequences of unchecked ambition and the inherent instability of usurped power. Perhaps, shakespeare uses this to serve as a warning against the sacriligeous act of regicide and disrupting the natural order.
Shakespeare depcits lady macbeth as a duplicitous and manipulative character who weaponises language and gender to dominate Macbeth and pursue her ambition. when lady macbeth receives a letter from macbeth, she immediately degrades macbeth's nature as being 'too full of the milk of human kindess'. this establishes a clear power imbalance in their relationship, in which lady macbeth controls macbeth's sense of dignity and aims to fuel his ambition. specifically, the metaphor of 'milk' symbolises nurtuing, generous and compassionate qualities which are evident in macbeth. Yet, lady macbeth perceives this natural compassion as a flaw which highlights her rejection of moral compassion in the pursuit of power. Alternatively, the milk could be alluding to milk from a woman's breasts, which further reinforces lady macbeth's emascualtion towards macbeth, fuellingboth her sense of ambition, as well as macbeth's . lady macbeth's subversion of traditional gender roles is seen as unusal and unsettling in the jacobean era and shakespeare may be presenting this reversal of traditional roles as the catalyst of ruthless ambition. However, Lady macbeth may alternatively be viewed as a supportive wife who merely aims to guide macbeth into accomplishing his aims, despite it being a path of destruction and tyranny.

This is good - clear points + zoomed in analysis - but I don't think the last part was necessary, especially if you don't expand on it. Showing alternate viewpoints is good but not when it's just tacked onto the end of a paragraph and kind of out of place. Also, it's best to have the ending sentence of each paragraph clearly link back to the question, basically summarising what the points you made in the paragraph show about her ambition.

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by nikiiiiiii
This is good - clear points + zoomed in analysis - but I don't think the last part was necessary, especially if you don't expand on it. Showing alternate viewpoints is good but not when it's just tacked onto the end of a paragraph and kind of out of place. Also, it's best to have the ending sentence of each paragraph clearly link back to the question, basically summarising what the points you made in the paragraph show about her ambition.

oh ok thanksss

Reply 6

Id say this is good , but try to go into more areas of the quote , if you choose a quote you want to be able to talk about two areas in it so the milk + something else

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by Chicken124
Id say this is good , but try to go into more areas of the quote , if you choose a quote you want to be able to talk about two areas in it so the milk + something else

a bit late now, but thankssss:smile: i only used 6 quotes in my actual macbeth essay and overall for eng lit paper 1 i managed to score 63/64!!

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