Creative writing

Could someone please mark this and please give some improvements, thankyou.
I'm not really good at creative writing
Write a story about a human meeting an animal.
The daunting sky finally cleared itself from the tears of the heavens. The angelic light lined my leather skin, yet it was still as cold as ice. The darkened clouds came soon infecting the whole sky bringing with it, torment. The crimson sphere took its place in the abyss, it shone like the eternal fires deep underground. I could feel my sins radiating off of it. My skin parched with the screams of thirst began to shudder in the frost. I could see the tips of my fingers turn blue. My teeth shivered creating a clicking sound, it echoed throw the forest. I was alone, my fiends missing yet I’m still here. With only this phone.

My head felt light, the heart grasping at straws. My body began to shake violently the muscles in my arms and legs soon went from tense to numb. My palms glowed with drops of sweat trickling down my arms. Yet my breathing was stable and I hadn’t frozen yet. My eyes were drawn to the charcoal black screen of the phone. The phone was with me always, it stays with me, reminding me, calling to me. I stared snow - dazed waiting for it to light up but the wounds stretched far and deep within its eternal suffering too deep to work properly. The longer I stared the heavier my head became, the more my body began to relax, my eyelids closing in, drugged with the lethal slumber of the night.
Everything started to blur. The snow began to open its self-up, creating a resting place. It began to feel warm. Almost too warm.

Suddenly a muffled growl came from the woods behind me. My body once again froze, the punch of tension seeped in through all layers covering me, my mind filled with the screams of anxiety and drowsiness was now replaced by fear. For I never hear of that sound. It sounded far away yet too close. My ears on hight alarm waiting for another message. I tied to on the phone but it wouldn’t, I grew tired of the black screen. I tried everything smashing it, showing it, swinging it. But nothing happened. I clenched it in my hand knowing my saviours were a phone call away.

Then, a cracked could be heard.

My heart skipped a beat. I’m usually not like this, I was called fearless my family. My friends celebrated my bravery. I miss my friends, to think they would go missing was surprising, they loved adventures yet today it was different they like to live on the edge and scare me but not like this. CRACK. Another one snapped me back to my senses, it was coming closer it’s growl filled with bad intentions.

I could feel my face slowly melt into the heated ice. A shadow formed, oblong but tall slowly walked towards me. I could finally see the beast before me. I was attracted by the eyes as pure as an angle but violent as a devil. Its teeth bearing the sent of blood and violence. It stared back a me mercy was not an option. It turned its attention away from me focusing on the phone in my hand.

I couldn’t move. My veins coursed through, carrying horror all over my body. I too slowly turned to the phone in my hand it’s pebble stone grey fur shimmered in the moonlight. We stared for a moment; an eternity. I could feel the blood lust seeping form it. I thought for sure I would die to night.

I shut my eyes and prayed, all the while it studied me and my movements. Almost it too was looking at a human for the first time. Why am I still alive? I slowly opened my eyes to find it’s nose a hair away from mine.

We stayed like that for a long long time. Till one of us moved.

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nuhaah

hey girlll! skimmed it a little and its really good! im not good at marking, so theres this website called markme.ai and u can use it to mark ur work, the first few tries are free! so just input this question: "Write a story about a human meeting an animal." and then paste ur answer. the ai will then mark ur work accurately. hope this helps! :smile: