Creative writing

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Write a story about a journey
The lights grew faint and low by each passing minute. The road began to narrow down as the light began to thin into the darkness. I could no longer see, for my eyes were drugged with the lethal slumber of the night. Yes my mind was filled with tensions of where I was or where I was being taken to. My throat was dry, my stomach empty holding the remains of my heart. The hairs on my neck slowly backed down fearing what was yet to come.
I sat alone in the back seat, my arms and legs enclosed within each other, confined with ropes that started at the toe entangling every vain in my body. A flash of light enlightened my eye for a split second. That second feed me the information I needed. In the passenger seat and drivers seat were two figures. One oblong and tall his head seconds away from hitting the roof of the car the other, ominous but short. They were surprisingly quiet, relaxed even.
Then, the epiphany hit me. Sharp and hard. Why are they so calm? The thought doused my mind filling every inch of my body. The tension swelled in my lungs, the lump in my throat grew bigger, the heart ripping free from the veins holding it tight and drown itself in stomach acid.
My voice was about to rip its way through my body disguising itself as a scream, a cry for help. Then the thought came to me, where am I now? Is it better to stay here or go back to that dismal place, the place where cries were absorbed into walls blank, the stains of emotions grew transparent, the shadow of a human being was hidden deep within the abyss.
I made up my mind, although my mind was blank my arms numb my feet warm. At least they gave me a warm blanket here. I didn’t know where I was headed but it seemed safe. The silence was like a vail protecting me from the worries of the past. I drunkenly stared out the window the darkness consuming my mind. I’m tired now. I think ill rest a bit until wear there. I thought.