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I'm currently searching for a new job but I'm unsure as to how to structure/what to include in my personal profile. Kindly let me know if I'm on the right track and if there is anything that I should change. I'm currently searching for admin/receptionist jobs.

I am a self-motivated individual who is enthusiastic and prepared to take on new challenges. At present, I am a third-year undergraduate student studying Law at XXX. My vital skills are my organisational skills which help when under pressure to efficiently prioritise the most important tasks. I also have strong verbal and written communications skills when communicating with clients and colleagues. In past roles, I have solved many clients inquires either face-to-face, via phone or emails with empathy and professionalism. I am looking for a position to utilise my skills and develop them further.

Reply 1

That’s really not dreadful.

A couple of suggestions to tidy it up:

First, while there’s nothing wrong with saying you’re self-motivated (etc.), it currently sits as an island. Can you tie it to your experience? ‘I am a self-motivated individual with a track record of working under pressure to solve clients’ problems.’ places this in context and makes it feel like it means more. It doesn’t mean much to employers when people just list positive words.

On balance, I’d say ditch the law course from the statement (they’ll find out anyway when they read further on your CV). While it could be read as ‘this person is intelligent and professional’, it is more likely to signal ‘this person has significant other commitments and will resign within a year’. That’s going to be very off-putting to some employers while it might be true, it’s perhaps not the best way to introduce yourself.

‘My vital skills are my organisational skills’ sounds weird. Unless it’s a specific buzzword phrasing that you really want to use I’d simplify. ‘I am a good organiser and take pride in being able to handle multiple demands.’ or whatever.

Then, you need to hit this with the grammar hammer a bit. It’s ‘communication skills’ not ‘communications skills’. It’s ‘clients’ enquiries’ (clients’ has an apostrophe, I’m not randomly opening and closing the quote!). And it would read better if you wrote ‘face to face, over the phone, or via emails with empathy and professionalism.’

As a disclaimer, because I’ve picked apart your writing (sorry, it’s only to help you get a job!) the laws of irony state that there must be at least one appalling error in my post that I’ve failed to notice.

Finally, good luck!
(edited 2 months ago)

Reply 2

Original post
by Llamas_and_Cake
That’s really not dreadful.
A couple of suggestions to tidy it up:
First, while there’s nothing wrong with saying you’re self-motivated (etc.), it currently sits as an island. Can you tie it to your experience? ‘I am a self-motivated individual with a track record of working under pressure to solve clients’ problems.’ places this in context and makes it feel like it means more. It doesn’t mean much to employers when people just list positive words.
On balance, I’d say ditch the law course from the statement (they’ll find out anyway when they read further on your CV). While it could be read as ‘this person is intelligent and professional’, it is more likely to signal ‘this person has significant other commitments and will resign within a year’. That’s going to be very off-putting to some employers while it might be true, it’s perhaps not the best way to introduce yourself.
‘My vital skills are my organisational skills’ sounds weird. Unless it’s a specific buzzword phrasing that you really want to use I’d simplify. ‘I am a good organiser and take pride in being able to handle multiple demands.’ or whatever.
Then, you need to hit this with the grammar hammer a bit. It’s ‘communication skills’ not ‘communications skills’. It’s ‘clients’ enquiries’ (clients’ has an apostrophe, I’m not randomly opening and closing the quote!). And it would read better if you wrote ‘face to face, over the phone, or via emails with empathy and professionalism.’
As a disclaimer, because I’ve picked apart your writing (sorry, it’s only to help you get a job!) the laws of irony state that there must be at least one appalling error in my post that I’ve failed to notice.
Finally, good luck!

Thanks so much for your feedback. I've tried my best to utilise your feedback. Would you say this is any better?

I am a self-motivated individual who is prepared to take on new challenges. In past roles, I have endeavoured to solve clients’ issues regardless of difficulty face-to-face, over phone or via emails with empathy and professionalism. My vital skills include being a good organiser who can manage multiple demands efficiently. I also have strong verbal and written communication skills when communicating with clients and colleagues. I am looking for a position to utilise my skills and develop them further.

Reply 3

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by thelawya
Thanks so much for your feedback. I've tried my best to utilise your feedback. Would you say this is any better?
I am a self-motivated individual who is prepared to take on new challenges. In past roles, I have endeavoured to solve clients’ issues regardless of difficulty face-to-face, over phone or via emails with empathy and professionalism. My vital skills include being a good organiser who can manage multiple demands efficiently. I also have strong verbal and written communication skills when communicating with clients and colleagues. I am looking for a position to utilise my skills and develop them further.

Looks good to me 👍️

Good luck with the job hunting.
Original post
by thelawya
I'm currently searching for a new job but I'm unsure as to how to structure/what to include in my personal profile. Kindly let me know if I'm on the right track and if there is anything that I should change. I'm currently searching for admin/receptionist jobs.

I am a self-motivated individual who is enthusiastic and prepared to take on new challenges. At present, I am a third-year undergraduate student studying Law at XXX. My vital skills are my organisational skills which help when under pressure to efficiently prioritise the most important tasks. I also have strong verbal and written communications skills when communicating with clients and colleagues. In past roles, I have solved many clients inquires either face-to-face, via phone or emails with empathy and professionalism. I am looking for a position to utilise my skills and develop them further.

Don't bother with one, they are a waste of space and ignored unless you have a long career history and really have an established professional character. They are generally suggested by lazy CV Advisors because they fill up 10-15% of the CV and so it makes their life easier. But they are zero use to employers, so they are wasting valuable space for candidates.

Just go straight into providing evidence that you have the skills relevant to the job you are applying for.

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