help with prefect application Watch

bunzy
Badges: 5
Rep:
?
#1
Report Thread starter 10 years ago
#1
Hi, this is my prefect application and would really appreciate it if someone can have a look at it and give some comments on how to improve it. (my grammer is pretty bad so don't laugh )Thank you so much!

I would like to become a prefect as I see this is a great opportunity to contribute back to the school from which I have taken so much. I believe I have the qualities required of a General Prefect as I am reliable, responsible and am prepared to carry out duties to the best of my ability. I am confident that I can set a good example to all students in the school, as I am sensible, mature and always follow our sixth form’s code of conduct. I have regularly helped out at parents evenings and curriculum evening, from which I have gained confidence in communicating with parents and visitors. I have also volunteered to be part of the Reading Challenge where I tutored a year 7 students with her reading, I have really enjoyed this and have developed valuable skills in interacting and motivating younger students. Outside of school, I am also committed to various volunteer works, such as caring for patients at a Marie Curie Hospice, helping out at after-school clubs for disabled children and being a member of St John Ambulance with which I offer first aid to people. All of these activities have allowed me to gain experience in interacting with a wide range of people, working as a team and develop a sense of responsibility and commitment. I believe I am prepared to take on the extra responsibility of being a senior prefect.
3
reply
Lisaanne
Badges: 1
Rep:
?
#2
Report 10 years ago
#2
It sounds fine really, I've corrected a bit of grammar but your grammar isn't that bad!

(Original post by bunzy)
I would like to become a prefect as I see this is a great opportunity to contribute back to the school from which I have taken so much. I believe I have the qualities required of a General Prefect as I am reliable, responsible and am prepared to carry out duties to the best of my ability. I am confident that I can set a good example to all students in the school, as I am sensible, mature and always follow our sixth form’s code of conduct. I have regularly helped out at parents evenings and curriculum evening, from which I have gained confidence in communicating with parents and visitors. I have also volunteered to be part of the Reading Challenge where I tutored a year 7 students (should be the singular 'student') with her reading, I have really enjoyed this and have developed valuable skills in interacting and motivating younger students. Outside of school, I am also committed to various volunteer works (I would change this to 'voluntary roles'), such as caring for patients at a Marie Curie Hospice, helping out at after-school clubs for disabled children and being a member of St John Ambulance with which I offer first aid to people (This bit sounds odd, maybe try 'as a first aider'). All of these activities have allowed me to gain experience in (should be 'of') interacting with a wide range of people, working as a team and develop (should be 'developing')a sense of responsibility and commitment. I believe I am prepared to take on the extra responsibility of being a senior prefect.
0
reply
bunzy
Badges: 5
Rep:
?
#3
Report Thread starter 10 years ago
#3
thank you so much!
0
reply
iGurpreet
Badges: 8
Rep:
?
#4
Report 10 years ago
#4
You have to apply to become a prefect?
0
reply
HighSkies
Badges: 14
Rep:
?
#5
Report 10 years ago
#5
(Original post by bunzy)
I would like to become a prefect as I see this is a great opportunity to contribute back to the school from which I have taken so much.
I think the whole thing is good, however instead of putting what you put above I'd advise:
I would like to become a prefect as I see this is an excellent opportunity to contribute back to this school, which had supported me greatly.

I think 'taken so much' sounds a bit like you've ravaged the place.
And omg, you come from newcastle right? As in, Newcastle upon Tyne? Me too!
0
reply
bunzy
Badges: 5
Rep:
?
#6
Report Thread starter 10 years ago
#6
(Original post by HighSkies)
I think the whole thing is good, however instead of putting what you put above I'd advise:
I would like to become a prefect as I see this is an excellent opportunity to contribute back to this school, which had supported me greatly.

I think 'taken so much' sounds a bit like you've ravaged the place.
And omg, you come from newcastle right? As in, Newcastle upon Tyne? Me too!
hehe thanks, yep im from newcastle, why? is it that unusual for newcastle people to go on TSR?
0
reply
HighSkies
Badges: 14
Rep:
?
#7
Report 10 years ago
#7
(Original post by bunzy)
hehe thanks, yep im from newcastle, why? is it that unusual for newcastle people to go on TSR?
You're the first person I've see nthats all. But I haven't been on TSR too long tho so I can't really say.
0
reply
beingAlex
Badges: 0
Rep:
?
#8
Report 9 years ago
#8
This link really helped me.

realityisyourperception.blogspot .com/.../prefect-application-due.html
1
reply
GCSE_BWOY
Badges: 0
Rep:
?
#9
Report 4 years ago
#9
thanks
0
reply
noura benmoussa
Badges: 0
Rep:
?
#10
Report 4 years ago
#10
oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo oooooooooooooooooooooookkkkkkkkk kkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkk kkkkkkkkkkkkkkk
0
reply
noura benmoussa
Badges: 0
Rep:
?
#11
Report 4 years ago
#11
ok thank u
0
reply
Vinita Nemakanga
Badges: 0
Rep:
?
#12
Report 3 years ago
#12
I love your essay. I don't see any reason why you where saying my English grammar isn't good at all. One gold star for you my friend. ☆.
0
reply
Beckyboodles123
Badges: 0
Rep:
?
#13
Report 2 years ago
#13
I am going to apply the role of a prefect soon and we have to hand in a letter and have an interview does any one have tips on what to say at the interview 😊
0
reply
gdickenson
Badges: 6
Rep:
?
#14
Report 2 years ago
#14
(Original post by Beckyboodles123)
I am going to apply the role of a prefect soon and we have to hand in a letter and have an interview does any one have tips on what to say at the interview 😊
Hey I'm not sure if your interview are the same, but I have heard that last year at my school they asked people applying for prefect what they would do if their friend was smoking - I think this is to see if you are fair and know to report even your friend for going against school rules. Also, if you say you will bring new ideas to the school, give examples x
0
reply
CoolaClime Student
Badges: 3
Rep:
?
#15
Report 2 years ago
#15
(Original post by bunzy)
Hi, this is my prefect application and would really appreciate it if someone can have a look at it and give some comments on how to improve it. (my grammer is pretty bad so don't laugh )Thank you so much!

I would like to become a prefect as I see this is a great opportunity to contribute back to the school from which I have taken so much. I believe I have the qualities required of a General Prefect as I am reliable, responsible and am prepared to carry out duties to the best of my ability. I am confident that I can set a good example to all students in the school, as I am sensible, mature and always follow our sixth form’s code of conduct. I have regularly helped out at parents evenings and curriculum evening, from which I have gained confidence in communicating with parents and visitors. I have also volunteered to be part of the Reading Challenge where I tutored a year 7 students with her reading, I have really enjoyed this and have developed valuable skills in interacting and motivating younger students. Outside of school, I am also committed to various volunteer works, such as caring for patients at a Marie Curie Hospice, helping out at after-school clubs for disabled children and being a member of St John Ambulance with which I offer first aid to people. All of these activities have allowed me to gain experience in interacting with a wide range of people, working as a team and develop a sense of responsibility and commitment. I believe I am prepared to take on the extra responsibility of being a senior prefect.
My best advize here would be "please think, why you want to do this firstly"

Not all but a fair lot of Prefects get rail-roaded into doing things that a Teachers "eyes and ears" are for in reality as well it could divide you from friends/wreck your reputation as who you stand for now! Be really honest here O.P is my advize as I know a lot of Prefects who it has gone wrong for (as they think, "yeah this can help" but it turns very sour very very quickly!
1
reply
starprince
Badges: 0
Rep:
?
#16
Report 2 years ago
#16
they are good thanks
0
reply
asyakidan1994
Badges: 2
Rep:
?
#17
Report 2 years ago
#17
no its perfect ahhahahahah do you get it
0
reply
asyakidan1994
Badges: 2
Rep:
?
#18
Report 2 years ago
#18
(Original post by bunzy)
Hi, this is my prefect application and would really appreciate it if someone can have a look at it and give some comments on how to improve it. (my grammer is pretty bad so don't laugh )Thank you so much!

I would like to become a prefect as I see this is a great opportunity to contribute back to the school from which I have taken so much. I believe I have the qualities required of a General Prefect as I am reliable, responsible and am prepared to carry out duties to the best of my ability. I am confident that I can set a good example to all students in the school, as I am sensible, mature and always follow our sixth form’s code of conduct. I have regularly helped out at parents evenings and curriculum evening, from which I have gained confidence in communicating with parents and visitors. I have also volunteered to be part of the Reading Challenge where I tutored a year 7 students with her reading, I have really enjoyed this and have developed valuable skills in interacting and motivating younger students. Outside of school, I am also committed to various volunteer works, such as caring for patients at a Marie Curie Hospice, helping out at after-school clubs for disabled children and being a member of St John Ambulance with which I offer first aid to people. All of these activities have allowed me to gain experience in interacting with a wide range of people, working as a team and develop a sense of responsibility and commitment. I believe I am prepared to take on the extra responsibility of being a senior prefect.
ahhahahhahaha your funny asyakidan1994
0
reply
gracemulgrew1
Badges: 1
Rep:
?
#19
Report 1 year ago
#19
(Original post by bunzy)
Hi, this is my prefect application and would really appreciate it if someone can have a look at it and give some comments on how to improve it. (my grammer is pretty bad so don't laugh )Thank you so much!

I would like to become a prefect as I see this is a great opportunity to contribute back to the school from which I have taken so much. I believe I have the qualities required of a General Prefect as I am reliable, responsible and am prepared to carry out duties to the best of my ability. I am confident that I can set a good example to all students in the school, as I am sensible, mature and always follow our sixth form’s code of conduct. I have regularly helped out at parents evenings and curriculum evening, from which I have gained confidence in communicating with parents and visitors. I have also volunteered to be part of the Reading Challenge where I tutored a year 7 students with her reading, I have really enjoyed this and have developed valuable skills in interacting and motivating younger students. Outside of school, I am also committed to various volunteer works, such as caring for patients at a Marie Curie Hospice, helping out at after-school clubs for disabled children and being a member of St John Ambulance with which I offer first aid to people. All of these activities have allowed me to gain experience in interacting with a wide range of people, working as a team and develop a sense of responsibility and commitment. I believe I am prepared to take on the extra responsibility of being a senior prefect.
nothing wrong absoulutely excellent
0
reply
Snehkapoor
Badges: 3
Rep:
?
#20
Report 1 year ago
#20
This is copied.😡😡😡
1
reply
X

Quick Reply

Attached files
Write a reply...
Reply
new posts
Latest
My Feed

See more of what you like on
The Student Room

You can personalise what you see on TSR. Tell us a little about yourself to get started.

Personalise

University open days

  • Sheffield Hallam University
    Foundation Year Open Evening Undergraduate
    Wed, 17 Jul '19
  • Regent's University London
    Psychotherapy Open Evening Postgraduate
    Wed, 17 Jul '19
  • Norwich University of the Arts
    Postgraduate (MA) Open Day Postgraduate
    Thu, 18 Jul '19

Are you tempted to change your firm university choice now or on A-level results day?

Yes, I'll try and go to a uni higher up the league tables (121)
19.45%
Yes, there is a uni that I prefer and I'll fit in better (58)
9.32%
No I am happy with my course choice (351)
56.43%
I'm using Clearing when I have my exam results (92)
14.79%

Watched Threads

View All
Latest
My Feed