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    I recorded just a 2.18 pre written rap on my web cam

    its on youtube search Rap with me - Markus

    any opinions wecome, just be interesting o see what people think.

    thanks
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    That's not as bad as I thought it'd be actually, although it'd be much better if the lip synch wasn't stuffed up
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    Is it supposed to be sung that camply?
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    Not bad!
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    I'm gonna be honest mate, it is pretty shocking

    But ALOT better than I could do and if you enjoy doing it, stick with it I guess, although the lyrics are pretty wierd
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    To be honest, it's not as bad as I expected, but it just sounds like you're talking... If I were you, I'd have some kind of catchy chorus in there - it was forgettable tbh without a hook like that.
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    im not competing with anyone i just wanted some feedback. thanks for checking it out. i never said i was the best or anything lol and ye its **** with my web cam and no chrous.
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    Some bits I would say are good, most of it is a bit weak. The faster bits are better
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    Link me to it and I'll watch.

    Even better, embed the video here. I'm too lazy to search.
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    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TMYG1PkTaGY
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    no offence your voice is not really good. the accent is too strange dont know if you are tryin to mimic an american one or are using an english accent. also your voice doesn't really sound street enough with a song with quite aggressive subject manner. lyrics are actually pretty decent. but voice and flow could improve alot but maybe that could be because your maybe not that comfortable or at ease
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    (Original post by Tha_Black_Shinobi)
    no offence your voice is not really good. the accent is too strange dont know if you are tryin to mimic an american one or are using an english accent. also your voice doesn't really sound street enough with a song with quite aggressive subject manner. lyrics are actually pretty decent. but voice and flow could improve alot but maybe that could be because your maybe not that comfortable or at ease
    im not offended i appreciate anything constructive people have to say. i can understand where ur coing from but what ways can you improve on those?
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    (Original post by Markus_09_)
    im not offended i appreciate anything constructive people have to say. i can understand where ur coing from but what ways can you improve on those?
    i think confidence is a big factor in it, say if you do a bragging rap and you really believe what you are saying then that usually results in better verses and writing it flows more easily. that and drawing influences from rappers that you enjoy/admire. i cant realy give any other advice as i've only really written raps for fun never really seriously
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    I see you like Eminem.
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    "if i ever see a ***** try to trap me again/imma slap her so hard she will fall back on her friend"

    lmfaooooooooooooooooo has got to be one of the funniest rhymes ever, i think your facial expressions made it even funnier.

    but not bad, i was actually expecting worse. But broaden your topic of discussion.
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    I like your little beard :yes:
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    (Original post by trixx)
    I see you like Eminem.

    yea i do i think he's lyrically insane. but everything i write is me cos theres no point imitating.
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    (Original post by Nick_000)
    I like your little beard :yes:

    hahahahaaa for my next video it will be fully grown
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    Lyrically it's pretty good, a lot better than a lot of the stuff both in and out of the charts.

    It's your flow that needs working on. Try to be less stop and start. It improves as the song goes on though so I guess if you keep rapping it will come with time and confidence.

    You need to drop the american accent too - you're obv not american and it makes you sound like a wannabe/ faker.

    Still, as people have said above it's a pretty good rap. Influences of early Eminem are clear and that's always a good thing.
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    (Original post by King4eva)
    "if i ever see a ***** try to trap me again/imma slap her so hard she will fall back on her friend"

    lmfaooooooooooooooooo has got to be one of the funniest rhymes ever, i think your facial expressions made it even funnier.

    but not bad, i was actually expecting worse. But broaden your topic of discussion.

    haha thanks and ye i will thats just 2 mins but if i make other songs theyll be different topics
 
 
 

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