(Original post by El Doctoré de Mystéro)
Lyrically it's pretty good, a lot better than a lot of the stuff both in and out of the charts.
It's your flow that needs working on. Try to be less stop and start. It improves as the song goes on though so I guess if you keep rapping it will come with time and confidence.
You need to drop the american accent too - you're obv not american and it makes you sound like a wannabe/ faker.
Still, as people have said above it's a pretty good rap. Influences of early Eminem are clear and that's always a good thing.
thanks, and yea im aware of the accent just sticked with me when i started imitating at 14. but ill keep on working at it
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- 27-07-2009 17:52
(Original post by Markus_09_)
- 27-07-2009 17:56
I recorded just a 2.18 pre written rap on my web cam
its on youtube search Rap with me - Markus
any opinions wecome, just be interesting o see what people think.
- 27-07-2009 19:02
Drop the American accent. Need more variation of tone. Flow needs a lot of work. But apart from that, not awful.
- 27-07-2009 19:27
lol at i even hate you
quite good though.
- 27-07-2009 20:56
start was weak (but it gets better) and flow's mad choppy;
lyrically it's kinda cliché.. like that 'humble rapper type', which works some of the time (probably did here) - i thought it was ok.
also you vary your tone too much which is what makes it stand out as overly amateur, along with the flow.
it's not bad.. definitely improve your flow and try to use less syllables per bar.
and the accent doesn't fit, you're not american.Last edited by aMAXin; 27-07-2009 at 20:59.