Computer science degree personal statement example (1b) with review and advice

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I have chosen to study Computer Science because I am fascinated by how computers work and I spend most of my spare time designing programs and web pages because I enjoy problem solving and logical thinking. My ambition is to work in programming for a large corporate company, working as part of a team to maximise their IT potential.

I enjoy designing web pages and designed a prototype website for a software development company called Geologix. This involved writing the text for the site and adding icons so that visitors could download software. I created a members' area using passwords and used various different programmes to set up graphics flashpoints. I also liased with the senior partners to make sure that the site fulfilled the requirements of the company.

In the summer of 2002 I worked for McDonalds. This gave me experience in dealing with money, ensuring hygiene standards and dealing with difficult customers. This also developed my communication skills, sense of responsibility and my determination to carry on with higher education! During my time at McDonalds, I managed the branch's accounts database which also involved correcting faults in the system to ensure the programme's reliability of use.

My main extra-curricular interest is sport. I have been Capitan of ******** College mixed and 1st hockey teams and Capitan of ******* school colts' hockey team. Being a captain has taught me leadership skills and how to work positively with others to motivate and encourage. I have also played table tennis for Norfolk and Norwich and I won first prize for my research and presentation on the history of table tennis, which awarded me the Howell Prize.

Apart from sport, I was voted onto the Principal's Council, which meant liasing between the head teacher and the student body in which my role also meant organising charity events to help raise money for the school. I have completed some volunteer work helping at the Norfolk Show, being in charge of the horse enclosure and ensuring its safety. This further developed my sense of teamwork and responsibility.

I am determined to study Computer Science at degree level to fulfil my ambition to work in the IT job sector and I know that the course will enable me to thoroughly enjoy my time at university. My work experience has shown me that Computer Science is the ideal course for me and I would also look forward to contributing to the sporting activities of the university, particularly in hockey. I am passionate about every thing to do with computers and would feel completely dedicated to further my studies at a higher level.


Reviewer comment:

  • Good opening sentence to address the reason for applying

  • Work experience is great but could be expanded further to show the applicant’s strength and interest in the area outside of school

  • McDonald’s experience is good, however can be condensed to the relevant parts to do with computer science and expanded here instead.

  • Some repeated spelling mistakes throughout the personal statement.

  • There is some repetition of the desire to edit web pages.