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I have been fascinated by computers and how they work from an early age. Some of my earliest memories are of sitting with my father in the kitchen watching him fix computers. I started to learn the piano and play chess from an early age this helped me to think logically and algorithmically. I enrolled in a small junior computer club when I was 7; this sparked my enthusiasm for the subject.
In primary school I will never forget the feeling of success I got when there was a problem with the network and I identified and fixed the problem. The interest in computers then stretched to high school where I graduated top of my class in IT and gained an interest in mathematics where I tutored younger students. I had a week work experience in the kitchen of the Cardiff Marriott. In this time I got the opportunity to work as a team and build my problem solving and time management skills. I also helped them to start using an online system to order in stock. My product design project in technology gave me an insight into how large scale projects are managed and manufactured. I learnt a great deal about computer aided design and manufacture. From high school I knew that computing was the direction that I wanted to head in.
I enrolled onto the National Diploma for IT Practitioners at college specialising in Software Development, I instantly knew that this was the career for me. I had an immediate bond with some of the subjects on this course namely event driven and object oriented programming. I feel that everything made sense and that everything fitted into place. I also enjoy systems analysis and design. This allows for me to take a problem analyse it and come up with a solution. I find that this is a strong point of mine. The networking side of the course also appeals to me; this is because it fulfils my desire of balance between hardware and the essential running software.
During my time at college I have engaged in a few different projects. I became the Enterprise Representative for Coleg Glan Hafren. For this I attended many events where I was the youngest to attend. Through the enterprise work I became a member of The National Consortium of University Entrepreneurs and also entered a College version of the Dragons Den in which I was placed in the top 12. I co-started an event-organising business in which we specialised in under 18’s events. Next I co-started a web hosting company in which I used to help small businesses set up websites for ecommerce. I also hosted on a very popular online radio show.
I then became involved with a well known Bargoed based chimney sweeper business and helped them to become digital by designing a logo and a website for them and settting up a network in their main office so that they could communicate more efficiently and access files from a central location. Travelling is a hobby of mine, in particular in the USA. It has been a dream of mine to live there or perhaps study for a long time. I have recently taken a keen interest in mobile computing. Since I have gotten a new smart phone I can see the potential that it and cloud computing holds and I am currently looking into designing applications for it. I have an interest in cinema and regularly attend. I have had a few small acting positions for minor productions. I present a computerised karaoke show with my father bi-weekly. I have a big interest in recording and listening to music. I also regularly volunteer at RNIB recording audio books and poems for the vision impaired.
Reviewer comment:
Work experience section is good but needs to avoid listing and explain how it interested the applicant more
Final paragraph touches more on interest of applicant but can be expanded. Tone is too informal here.
Some spelling mistakes
Too much content about A-levels
Lots of listing and topics do not go into enough depth.
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