Would anyone mind reading through my essay so far and telling me what they think about it? I still need to write a paragraph on structure but not sure what to write. Not sure what grade it would be either.
In the poems Remains and Exposure by Simon Armitage and Wilfred Owen the reality of war is explored both physically and mentally. Both poems show that war is not the nonstop fighting and excitement that it is portrayed as in propaganda and is instead a dehumanizing and never-ending experience.
In “exposure” the narrator is irritated at the dullness of having to wait in the trenches of WW1 instead of the promised non-stop fighting. This is shown by the repeated phrase “but nothing happens” that is at the end of multiple stanzas. This supports Owen’s beliefs that the war is not worth fighting and that the soldiers are giving away their lives for something of little importance. This phrase is also ironic as he is saying that nothing happens even though they are slowly dying. The phrase also contrasts some of the quite complex imagery throughout the poem with a simple and unimaginative phrase. The author of the poem may have done this to show the bleakness of war.
In comparison, “Remains” starts in media res and similar to “Exposure” contains a lot of vivid imagery. However, the language used in remains is a lot more informal compared to exposure. This could suggest that the two poets had very different backgrounds. For example, Armitage says, “and tosses his guts back into his body” This seems like a very casual -almost cold-hearted- thing to do to for the soldier and potentially may reflect how human life is wasted and soldiers' lives become disposable in war. This could relate to the beliefs of Wilfred Owen that war is unimportant and is the cause of unneeded deaths. The word “guts” is also very visceral and is used to show that the soldiers are desensitized to the horror and reality of war. This would make the reader think that the reality of war is gory and incredibly sad.
The themes of suffering and the reality of war is also explored in “Exposure” when Owen writes “Our brains ache, in the merciless iced east winds that knive us...” The collective pronoun “our” shows that this is a shared experience for soldiers and its repeated use can also be seen in “Remains”. The emotional and physical pain of the men is only shown by the personified wind which appears to be persistently attacking them. The power of nature is shown in this quote along with the sibilant sounds further reinforcing their exhaustion and fatigue. This shows the reality of war to be deep and unyielding.
The long-term effects of war are also shown in “Remains” as the memory of a “probably armed, possibly not” looter that stays on the mind of the narrator the whole of the poem. He describes this situation as “dug in behind enemy lines” suggesting the potential PTSD problems a soldier has. The looters death is stuck inside his head. This may cause a reader to question as to why soldiers are sent into a warzone. It is very likely it was the writer's intention to do this as Wilfred Owen believed that soldiers should not be sent into war in the first place.
The structure in “Exposure” especially shows the reality of war with the anti-climactic ending of each stanza. This shows the boring reality of war by contrasting the powerful and highly emotive sentences in the lines beforehand. It builds up to nothing happening. The repetitive rhyme scheme of ABBAC also shows the boring repetitiveness of war. Owen would have done this because he wanted his reader to empathize with how the soldiers felt with the anticlimactic nature of the war. Instead they are slowly being killed by the weather.
On the other hand, in “Remains”, the structure shows how the reality of war has affected the soldier Armitage is narrating. This is shown by the repetition of the phrases “somebody else” and “my”. The phrase "somebody else” is used in the first few stanzas when the soldier is still at war. This shows that he is minimizing his own role in the killing of the looter and instead blaming someone else. Later on in the poem, when he is alone at home, he does not blame anyone but himself. In the poem the impact of the war is personal to the soldier. This shows that in the reality of war is that it can put a huge burden on soldiers, and it means they must live with everything they did in the war.
[Edit] Added 2 paragraphs on structure