I'm not too good grammar wise
but I'll try and help with content
For the second paragraph you could include where peterborough is in the uk- other than near cambridge- but that's about it
for the first one, you could talk more about the general decor of your house, is it a modern styled house? what colour is the outside? is all the furniture from ikea? little things just to add- but if the other paras are well sized it should be alright XP hey! you could maybe include a little past tense anecdote about something that happened in the house ('AND THAT'S WHY WE DONT HAVE ANY CARPET ANY MORE').... OOH the last sentence- c'est important pour moi je trouve...-is that correct? do you not need a word between moi and je trouve? like parce que? NO I'M WRONG... something about that sentence seems weird? oh well :/
'in my opinion it's important for me I find my house very comfortable, I like it'? is that a right translation? ARGH