is this e-mail formal enough for the university of cambrudge?

Dear Sir/Madam,
This is a request for more information about your entrance requirements for the Law Department of the University of Cambridge. I am an Algerian student about to undertake my final exam of high school (Baccaulaureate exam). I am taking the Algerian Baccaulaureate and am hoping to take a foundation year, thus allowing me to study at a British university. I would like to know if I can apply to study in the Cambridge University, and if so, what grades am I expected to obtain in order to have a competitive application?

Thank you in advance for your attention to my request, I look forward to receiving your response.

Yours sincerely,

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Reply 3

TurboCretin

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I can see others are pitching in with corrections. On a separate note, you should probably include the degree you are considering. Are you asking about their undergraduate degree in law? This is called a 'BA in Law'.

Also, you should be aware that a law degree at an English university will require very good English, especially Cambridge. If you feel your grammar could be better, it might be worth putting some time in now to improve your writing.

(edited 9 years ago)

Reply 4

Civil Dispute

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Without sounding harsh, if you can't string together an email to Cambridge using decent punctuation, law probably isn't the best degree to pursue.

Reply 5

semperaslan

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Camb-Cambrudge :rofl2:

No but really, you need to fix the English in that letter, it's awfully written. You need proper sentences and to sort out your spelling.

Reply 6

fizzers

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Original post by EatAndRevise

Dear Sir/Madam,
This is to request more information about your entrance requirements for the Law Department of the University of Cambridge. I am an Algerian student about to undertake my final exam of high school (Baccaulaureate exam) I am planning to book for a foundation year in order to apply to a british univerisity, as I am taking this exam (the algerian baccalaureate). I would like to know if I can apply to study in the Cambridge university, and if so, what grades I am expected to obtain in order to have a competitive application?

Thank you in advance for your attention to my request, I look forward to receiving your response.

Yours sincerly,

------- The highlighted segment requires amendment but I am not too sure about how to change it.

My two cents: something like 'I am taking the Algerian Baccalaureate and am hoping to take a foundation year in order to study at a British university'?

Also on mobile which is an absolute pain and this suggestion really isn't the best, sorry

Reply 7

Original post by fizzers

My two cents: something like 'I am taking the Algerian Baccalaureate and am hoping to take a foundation year in order to study at a British university'?

Also on mobile which is an absolute pain and this suggestion really isn't the best, sorry

Ah, that's the stuff. I was bewildered by that sentence :s-smilie:

Reply 8

fizzers

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Original post by EatAndRevise

Ah, that's the stuff. I was bewildered by that sentence :s-smilie:

Yeah, I was quite muddled as well. Is OP saying that he wants to take a foundation year at a British uni bc he wants to study at a British uni? (...what....) He should probably spell Cambridge right as well- ref: title

Reply 9

Original post by fizzers

Yeah, I was quite muddled as well. Is OP saying that he wants to take a foundation year at a British uni bc he wants to study at a British uni? (...what....) He should probably spell Cambridge right as well- ref: title

I have absolutely no idea (lol). I did not notice that haha.

Reply 10

Changing Skies

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Original post by fizzers

Yeah, I was quite muddled as well. Is OP saying that he wants to take a foundation year at a British uni bc he wants to study at a British uni? (...what....) He should probably spell Cambridge right as well- ref: title

I'm pretty sure the title was a typo considering it's spelt correctly in the post :tongue:

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Reply 11

Blackacre

Original post by TurboCretin

I can see others are pitching in with corrections. On a separate note, you should probably include the degree you are considering. Are you asking about their undergraduate degree in law? This is called a 'BA in Jurisprudence'.

Also, you should be aware that a law degree at an English university will require very good English, especially Cambridge. If you feel your grammar could be better, it might be worth putting some time in now to improve your writing.

Not at Cambridge - it's a "BA Law". I suspect you're thinking of Oxford. :wink:

Reply 12

Old_Simon

Original post by EatAndRevise

Dear Sir/Madam,
This is a request for more information about your entrance requirements for the Law Department of the University of Cambridge. I am an Algerian student about to undertake my final exam of high school (Baccaulaureate exam). I am taking the Algerian Baccaulaureate and am hoping to take a foundation year, thus allowing me to study at a British university. I would like to know if I can apply to study in the Cambridge University, and if so, what grades am I expected to obtain in order to have a competitive application?

Thank you in advance for your attention to my request, I look forward to receiving your response.

Yours sincerly,

typo in sincerely

Reply 13

Original post by Old_Simon

typo in sincerely

shhhhhh, I copied and pasted.....

Reply 14

Old_Simon

I am tempted to say if a candidate can not compose a forum post in coherent English they may struggle studying Law at Cambrudge (sic).

Reply 15

humanb33N

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Original post by mariakrelifa

Dear Sir or Madam,
this is to request more information about you entrance requirement for the law department of the university of Cambridge, I am an Algerian student and I am about to take my final exam of high school (baccaulaureate exam), I am planning to book for a foundation year in order to apply to a british univerisity, as I am taking this exam (the algerian baccalaureate), I would like to know if I can apply to study in the Cambridge university, and if so, what are the grades I am expected to get in order to have a competitive application?
thank you in advance for your attention to my request, I look forward in receiving your response
yours sincerly,

If you could correct the potential grammar mistakes that'd be great, thank you =)

Here's my best shot, OP :smile:

:

Subject: Undergraduate application to Law at Cambridge

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am currently an Algerian student in the process of taking my final Baccalaureate exams in my last year of high school. I am considering making an application to the University of Cambridge's faculty of Law for a BA degree and I would be very grateful if you could inform me what grades I will need to attain in these examinations in order to make my application competitive.
Thank you in advance for the time taken to answer this query.

Yours Sincerely,

{name}

(edited 9 years ago)

Reply 16

fizzers

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Original post by Changing Skies

I'm pretty sure the title was a typo considering it's spelt correctly in the post :tongue:

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Haha I know, I wasn't being all that serious. :smile:

He might still want to look out for it though, I can't imagine anything worse than spelling the name of the uni I want to go to wrong

Reply 17

humanb33N

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Original post by Picnic1

You can't even spell 'Cambridge' correctly in your topic post. You said 'you entrance requirement' instead of 'your entrance requirements'. You accidentally dissed them by not capitalising. (you should have said University of Cambridge, not 'university of Cambridge' - you could be talking about any university in Cambridge e.g. Anglia Ruskin with the latter).

'baccaulaureate' is a slight misspelling - it should be 'Baccalaureate'.

You put 'british univerisity' instead of 'British university'.

'algerian' should have been capitalised as 'Algerian'.

It's not 'the Cambridge university', it's 'Cambridge University' (or more usually for the last 20 years or so, the University of Cambridge').

'thank you' should be capitalised as 'Thank you' instead.

'sincerly' should be 'sincerely'.

Your spelling is a shambles. If you get in Cambridge partly thanks to our help then it proves that there is no God.

Was this malice needed? No. It's people like you who make this world quite a mean place :angry:

Edit: This post was rude. I'd rather have replied "Was this malice needed? No."

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Old_Simon