english lit paragraph !!

Hi can someone plz give me feedback on this? i rlly want to improve my english lit for gcses which are soon and it would really help.
It’s a comparison paragraph of The prelude and ozymandias :
In Ozymandias, Shelley clearly shows nature and time to have a significantly larger amount of power than mankind. This is shown where it says, “the lone and level sands stretch far away.” This quote demonstrates how the pharoah’s work is gone and lost to the ‘sands’ which could metaphorically represent time of which show how he lost all his status and value due to time’s power. The alliteration gives the sentence a longlasting sound and tone as if to visualise the sands themselves. This juxtaposes the power and ego of the pharoah and how none of it remains. The quote could also be a metaphor to describe how in life we could be different but in death we are all equal. This represents to the reader how nature and time always have more power regardless of how significant you are.
This is also represented in The Prelude of which also strongly demonstrates the idea of man versus nature, and that nature inevitably holds more control. This can be implied through the personification in the quote, “led by her”. Wandsworth may have done this to personify her to be a mother leading a child or he is referring to ‘Mother nature.’ This connotes to the contrast of how nature nurtures the entire planet, similar to how a women nurtures her child. This shows natures superiority power over mankind. The use of female pronouns links to femininity and creation and nurturing of life as a mother does. Wandsowrth does this to possibly suggest how when he was younger nature looked and cared for him. To the reader we see how nature holds power over the planet and its creations. Alternatively, the verb ‘led’ could suggest that the speaker is bewildered by the beauty of nature and follows her. This further suggests how easily nature overpowers man.
thank youuu

Hi can someone plz give me feedback on this? i rlly want to improve my english lit for gcses which are soon and it would really help.
It’s a comparison paragraph of The prelude and ozymandias :
In Ozymandias, Shelley clearly shows nature and time to have a significantly larger amount of power than mankind. This is shown where it says, “the lone and level sands stretch far away.” This quote demonstrates how the pharoah’s work is gone and lost to the ‘sands’ which could metaphorically represent time of which show how he lost all his status and value due to time’s power. The alliteration gives the sentence a longlasting sound and tone as if to visualise the sands themselves. This juxtaposes the power and ego of the pharoah and how none of it remains. The quote could also be a metaphor to describe how in life we could be different but in death we are all equal. This represents to the reader how nature and time always have more power regardless of how significant you are.
This is also represented in The Prelude of which also strongly demonstrates the idea of man versus nature, and that nature inevitably holds more control. This can be implied through the personification in the quote, “led by her”. Wandsworth may have done this to personify her to be a mother leading a child or he is referring to ‘Mother nature.’ This connotes to the contrast of how nature nurtures the entire planet, similar to how a women nurtures her child. This shows natures superiority power over mankind. The use of female pronouns links to femininity and creation and nurturing of life as a mother does. Wandsowrth does this to possibly suggest how when he was younger nature looked and cared for him. To the reader we see how nature holds power over the planet and its creations. Alternatively, the verb ‘led’ could suggest that the speaker is bewildered by the beauty of nature and follows her. This further suggests how easily nature overpowers man.
thank youuu

good second bit (prelude), remember to talk about the writers intention and how it makes you feel/ the effects on you.
also link stuff back to your original point, like a summary, while both poets explore the power of nature in different ways, Shelley does it this way, whereas Wordsworth does it another way.