Provided that I continue with this same standard throughout the essay, would this paragraph get me an A and how could I improve it? Also, is there any way I could shorten it, since I have a slight problem with time?
Question: How accurate is it to say that the most important result of collectivisation was that it imposed Communist control in the countryside?
The most important reason in my opinion was the political benefits gained by Stalin. Coming into 1928, Stalin was engaged in a leadership struggle with the Right Wing and so took the initiative and implemented a scheme that would appeal to the left wing of the party, who were now without opposition due to the removal of Trotsky and Kamenev. His political move thus ensured that the conservative left wing would support Stalin and outvote the right wing on any policy. Collectivisation also ended thought of the continuation of the NEP. Dismissing the NEP in favor of a strict Communist policy would allow Stalin to 'absorb' most of the votes and allow him to stay in power while dismissing the right wing as a timid and weak group. However, one of the more important political results of the collectivisation policy was the building of the support that Stalin gained in the aftermath of the policy. With Communist members fearing a division in the party following the massive famine of around 10 million caused by the policy, the whole party was now behind Stalin, meaning that he emerged from the crisis even stronger than before and with more power due to his widespread support he now received.