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Paper 1 Question 3, Silk factory By Judith Allnatt Extract

Hey, Does anyone have any model answers on the 2020 paper 1 section A question 3 (Structure question)? I have things for the other questions just not question 3. If you do, It would be really appreciated. (My exam is tomorrow)
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Original post by 12345790
Hey, Does anyone have any model answers on the 2020 paper 1 section A question 3 (Structure question)? I have things for the other questions just not question 3. If you do, It would be really appreciated. (My exam is tomorrow)

Allnatt immediately mentions the “stranger child” in a narrowing focus of Rosie’s view. The past tense indicates that Rosie is reciting her past series of events, highlighting to the reader that she is aware of more information than they are, creating an unconscious relationship between Rosie and the reader as she is the sole character who will be able to uncover the truth about the child. The text then goes on to Rosie's current occupations, “her hands deep in suds” widening the focus and shifts a change in subject indicating the start of the story. The reader grows impatient by this as they urge and explanation behind the mysterious child and are induced to read on to find answers. Rosie goes on to watch her children playing peacefully in the garden and a more peaceful relaxed tone evolves. However, Alnott omits what the “trauma of the last few days” was making the reader still feel on edge.

Rosie’s focus zooms in on the garden in which the children are playing in. It is described as an “overgrown mess” and a “mass of nettles and brambles” creating an uneasy feeling within the reader as the garden appears to be unfamiliar and unsafe. The plot thickens as we see an appearance from the “stranger child” in Rosie’s Garden which has just been established as eldritch. The reader, similarly to Rosie is left questioning the origins of the child. They are induced to read on in the hopes of uncovering more information surrounding the enigma of the mystery child.

At the end of the extract the focus shifts to Rosie’s confusion about the origins of the child as she questions to herself how she got into the garden. Then Rosie catches a glimpse of the girls face which is “pale and drawn” attention is built as the reader learns more about the child's uncanny appearance. However, when Rosie goes outside to confront the child, she “was gone”. The writer emphatically positions a single line paragraph containing. Simple sentence to mount and dramatize the tension in the readers head as they are left without a sense of catharsis. The extract follows a contrasted cyclical structure as at the beginning Rosie sees the “stranger child” however by the end she is gone.

This is a practise answer i wrote have no idea how many marks it would get you
Reply 2
Original post by Rice460
Allnatt immediately mentions the “stranger child” in a narrowing focus of Rosie’s view. The past tense indicates that Rosie is reciting her past series of events, highlighting to the reader that she is aware of more information than they are, creating an unconscious relationship between Rosie and the reader as she is the sole character who will be able to uncover the truth about the child. The text then goes on to Rosie's current occupations, “her hands deep in suds” widening the focus and shifts a change in subject indicating the start of the story. The reader grows impatient by this as they urge and explanation behind the mysterious child and are induced to read on to find answers. Rosie goes on to watch her children playing peacefully in the garden and a more peaceful relaxed tone evolves. However, Alnott omits what the “trauma of the last few days” was making the reader still feel on edge.

Rosie’s focus zooms in on the garden in which the children are playing in. It is described as an “overgrown mess” and a “mass of nettles and brambles” creating an uneasy feeling within the reader as the garden appears to be unfamiliar and unsafe. The plot thickens as we see an appearance from the “stranger child” in Rosie’s Garden which has just been established as eldritch. The reader, similarly to Rosie is left questioning the origins of the child. They are induced to read on in the hopes of uncovering more information surrounding the enigma of the mystery child.

At the end of the extract the focus shifts to Rosie’s confusion about the origins of the child as she questions to herself how she got into the garden. Then Rosie catches a glimpse of the girls face which is “pale and drawn” attention is built as the reader learns more about the child's uncanny appearance. However, when Rosie goes outside to confront the child, she “was gone”. The writer emphatically positions a single line paragraph containing. Simple sentence to mount and dramatize the tension in the readers head as they are left without a sense of catharsis. The extract follows a contrasted cyclical structure as at the beginning Rosie sees the “stranger child” however by the end she is gone.

This is a practise answer i wrote have no idea how many marks it would get you

Thank you so much! I really appreciate this!
Reply 3
Okay so the source of which I used for question 4 was removed :frown: and I didn't get up to looking at it fully so If anyone has a model answer for question 4 to this paper 1 section A then that would be really appreciated too!
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Original post by 12345790
Okay so the source of which I used for question 4 was removed :frown: and I didn't get up to looking at it fully so If anyone has a model answer for question 4 to this paper 1 section A then that would be really appreciated too!

Secondly the girl's description appears to be fanatical and incongruous. The girl Is described as having a dress “like a home-made Cinderella costume’. The simile compares her clothes to that of a fairy tale character which suggest that she doesn’t exist in reality but in a type of fantasy in Rosie’s mind. Fairy tales are full of unexplained events so it doesn't seem surprising that the stranger child could be a part of Rosie's imagination or that she could have disappeared. The idea that the child is portrayed as a fairy tale character is seen earlier in the extract when the writer describes her “dusty looking plait” as it emphasises her fantastical appearance. In addition to this the girl is described as being misplaced as “she is sitting beside a clump of daisies” in the garden which is in direct contrast to the “overgrown mess” of a garden emphasising how she does not fit in with the surrounding and appears to be separated. The fact that Clara is “unfazed by the girl’s presence” reinforces the fact that the girl is nothing but a part of Rosie’s fantasy as she is the only person who can see her, her daughter who is right beside the stranger girl does not acknowledge her appearance.




The child’s sudden appearance does indicate that she was constructed by Rosie’s imagination and this is clear when Rosie asks herself; ‘where on earth had she come from?’, the rhetorical question indicating her clear confusion as to where she had suddenly materialised from. Again, there is description of the ‘high terrace’ which was ‘surely too high for a child to climb’, highlighting once again that the child had just miraculously appeared and explicitly stating that there was no way for the child to get in through the boundaries. However, this random appearance may be foreshadowing the past of the house that was a silk-factory to begin with. The author may be using the stranger child as a foundation to a wider plot which narrows the child’s role to appearing as a form of ghost that used to work in the factory. If this is the case, it suggests that the child would not be part of Rosie’s imagination and instead real however, may be visible to her eyes only. This would then provide a plausible explanation as to where the child had supposedly ‘come from’, perhaps she had always been there and Rosie is only acknowledging her appearance now.

This is not a full response but may spark some ideas
Reply 5
Original post by Rice460
Secondly the girl's description appears to be fanatical and incongruous. The girl Is described as having a dress “like a home-made Cinderella costume’. The simile compares her clothes to that of a fairy tale character which suggest that she doesn’t exist in reality but in a type of fantasy in Rosie’s mind. Fairy tales are full of unexplained events so it doesn't seem surprising that the stranger child could be a part of Rosie's imagination or that she could have disappeared. The idea that the child is portrayed as a fairy tale character is seen earlier in the extract when the writer describes her “dusty looking plait” as it emphasises her fantastical appearance. In addition to this the girl is described as being misplaced as “she is sitting beside a clump of daisies” in the garden which is in direct contrast to the “overgrown mess” of a garden emphasising how she does not fit in with the surrounding and appears to be separated. The fact that Clara is “unfazed by the girl’s presence” reinforces the fact that the girl is nothing but a part of Rosie’s fantasy as she is the only person who can see her, her daughter who is right beside the stranger girl does not acknowledge her appearance.




The child’s sudden appearance does indicate that she was constructed by Rosie’s imagination and this is clear when Rosie asks herself; ‘where on earth had she come from?’, the rhetorical question indicating her clear confusion as to where she had suddenly materialised from. Again, there is description of the ‘high terrace’ which was ‘surely too high for a child to climb’, highlighting once again that the child had just miraculously appeared and explicitly stating that there was no way for the child to get in through the boundaries. However, this random appearance may be foreshadowing the past of the house that was a silk-factory to begin with. The author may be using the stranger child as a foundation to a wider plot which narrows the child’s role to appearing as a form of ghost that used to work in the factory. If this is the case, it suggests that the child would not be part of Rosie’s imagination and instead real however, may be visible to her eyes only. This would then provide a plausible explanation as to where the child had supposedly ‘come from’, perhaps she had always been there and Rosie is only acknowledging her appearance now.

This is not a full response but may spark some ideas

I don't suppose you could share the beginning of your response, I've just gone completely blank and my exams tomorrow !!!!!
Hey have you done Q4
wow this is good.Anyone know how many marks this would be??
anyone know how many marks
I have some revision tips and tricks for this question if you want,For this question you need to summarise and identify any structural devices you come across,and talk about them(in depth),Explain what is the writer talking about,and he has done to encourage you as a reade.
How do you structure Q3
(edited 1 year ago)
In the beginning of the extract..In the middle.. (link to the previous paragraph if you want)In the end.. If that's what you meant
Reply 12
Original post by Rice460
Allnatt immediately mentions the “stranger child” in a narrowing focus of Rosie’s view. The past tense indicates that Rosie is reciting her past series of events, highlighting to the reader that she is aware of more information than they are, creating an unconscious relationship between Rosie and the reader as she is the sole character who will be able to uncover the truth about the child. The text then goes on to Rosie's current occupations, “her hands deep in suds” widening the focus and shifts a change in subject indicating the start of the story. The reader grows impatient by this as they urge and explanation behind the mysterious child and are induced to read on to find answers. Rosie goes on to watch her children playing peacefully in the garden and a more peaceful relaxed tone evolves. However, Alnott omits what the “trauma of the last few days” was making the reader still feel on edge.

Rosie’s focus zooms in on the garden in which the children are playing in. It is described as an “overgrown mess” and a “mass of nettles and brambles” creating an uneasy feeling within the reader as the garden appears to be unfamiliar and unsafe. The plot thickens as we see an appearance from the “stranger child” in Rosie’s Garden which has just been established as eldritch. The reader, similarly to Rosie is left questioning the origins of the child. They are induced to read on in the hopes of uncovering more information surrounding the enigma of the mystery child.

At the end of the extract the focus shifts to Rosie’s confusion about the origins of the child as she questions to herself how she got into the garden. Then Rosie catches a glimpse of the girls face which is “pale and drawn” attention is built as the reader learns more about the child's uncanny appearance. However, when Rosie goes outside to confront the child, she “was gone”. The writer emphatically positions a single line paragraph containing. Simple sentence to mount and dramatize the tension in the readers head as they are left without a sense of catharsis. The extract follows a contrasted cyclical structure as at the beginning Rosie sees the “stranger child” however by the end she is gone.

This is a practise answer i wrote have no idea how many marks it would get you

Definetly 8 marks maybe 7 marks

But great piece of writing

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