please can you mark this exam English language question 2 paper 1

Look in detail at this extract from lines 8 to 18 of the Source:

The wind came in gusts, at times shaking the coach as it travelled round the bend of the road, and in the exposed places on the high ground it blew with such force that the whole body of the coach trembled and swayed, rocking between the high wheels like a drunken man. The driver, muffled in a greatcoat to his ears, bent almost double in his seat in a faint attempt to gain shelter from his own shoulders, while the dispirited horses plodded sullenly to his command, too broken by the wind and the rain to feel the whip that now and again cracked above their heads, while it swung between the numb fingers of the driver. The wheels of the coach creaked and groaned as they sank into the ruts on the road, and sometimes they flung up the soft spattered mud against the windows, where it mingled with the constant driving rain, and whatever view there might have been of the countryside was hopelessly obscured.

How does the writer use language here to describe the effects of the weather?

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The writer uses language here to describe the effects of the weather to create a sense of fear and power. The verb “trembled” connotes the words fear and horror and personifies the “coach” with negative emotions, suggesting that the coach, which symbolises the idea of someone heartless and undiminished, it is now under the influence of the weather causing the “coach” to rock “between the high heels like a drunken men”. The simile “like a drunken man” conveys the image of conflict and instability, which therefore portrays the effects of the weather as a source for disaster and confusion. Perhaps the writer's purpose was to create a negativity, sadness and gloomy atmosphere through the use of images of imperfection, established from the noun “man”, and chaos, created from the adjective “drunken” and the verb “trembled” - which also create the sense of fear. This use of image involves the audience to be more sympathetic with the story.

The idea of the effects of the weather assuming their own power is further demonstrated when the ”driver … bent almost double in his seat in a faint attempt to gain shelter from his own shoulders”. The noun “driver” is referred to mankind and portrays them as leaders, therefore convey them as powerful, while the verb “bent” shows submission, therefore lack of power and will. This contrast is produced because the effects of the weather are powerful to the extent that mankind decides to sacrifice part of their own values to have hold of some minute quantity of power. The writer's purpose could have perhaps been to show how mankind is powerless or either how some powers are over mankind. This idea of the effects of the weather being over mankind is also suggested when the writer states “the dispirited horses plodded sullenly to his command, too broken by the wind and the rain”. The “wind” and “rain” are nouns that symbolise the weather itself. The adjective “dispirited” - which already established the idea of dreary as souls or spirits are connected with emotions, diversity and goodness-, the noun “horses” - symbolism of vitality and happiness - and the verb “broken” - emphasizing the imagery of power and chaos- are to highlight the audience that the effects of the weather are really impressive and over mankind, making the writer a manipulative entity that plays with the ideology and beliefs of the audience to convey his message of what real power looks like and why it is far from man.