Personal statement ain't feeling personal

What happens if my teachers keep changing my personal statement beyond reason and its stopped being MINE? Should i keep their decisions or go with what i feel is right and a true reflection of me

Make your own draft.

When you send it to your referee with a teacher approved version ask them to send it back to you because you've spotted a typo.

When they send it back replace the PS with your own version and when you send it will go straight to UCAS.

You're applying to university as an adult. Your teachers shouldn't be making changes to the extent that you're uncomfortable or that your ps isn't a true reflection.

Thanks guys, spoken to a few people who've done Uni and personal statements before and they say the same thing. Time to get the offers rolling

Born and schooled in London town, I attended the foggy school of Winchester College where I set on the path of academic success, after receiving the best GCSEs in the school to date, 7 Cs and 3 Ds - right then I understood that I was something special.As a Physics and Maths student, I derive great satisfaction from solving problems that initially seem impossible. Representing my school at the UKMT Senior Maths Challenge, as well as the national finals of the Science and Technology Challenge, I built up a keen open-mindedness for new ideas. Game theory, and its applications in economics, are of great interest to me and have helped me better appreciate the sheer scope of the precise art that is sculpture. I find it particularly interesting how people who are more intelligent then I use game theory to anticipate competitors' actions, comparing the risks and potential benefits of certain business strategies, because this inevitably involves a degree of psychology and philosophy - a testament to the diverse nature of economics, which is beautifully demonstrated by the prisoner's dilemma (Something that I do not have a clue about)My mathematical grounding is complemented by my thick moon shaped glasses, which continually helps me develop a more balanced and well-rounded outlook on the world around me. Fuelled by my petrol, in development economics I enjoy discussing related issues in German with my imaginary friend, Hitler. I am fascinated by the sheer number of theories behind worsening poverty in the third world, and how some directly contradict each other. For example, I agree with William Easterly's view that initiatives like debt-relief, which I find to be lorarcrastic with bank bailouts, have often been counterproductive. While they may be necessary in some cases, I believe that both practices tend to align the involved parties' incentives in a way that is in fact detrimental to the economies and societies concerned. The April anti-capitalist protests are a very real testament to my point and coincided with my work experience at a London fund management firm. More recently, the Conservatives' plans for public sector cuts have already been met with criticism from the public; this illustrates the challenges faced by economists, as they search for socially viable solutions to inherently economic problems. The opportunity for extensive study and analysis of such issues attracts me to economics at university.Involving myself fully with my school has really helped to transform my educational experience; I was recently elected Head Boy by staff and students, following a campaign that helped develop my interpersonal skills, not to mention the capacity to take on criticism, as I worked with a wide range of people. Working successfully with others continues to be a key feature of my school career. In particular, helping younger pupils in my free time and being able to contribute to their development has been a rewarding and invaluable experience. The latter is especially true now that I work as an assistant tutor at a learning centre, where I am directly responsible for up to six children. In my role as Head Boy, I have demonstrated my ability to read; just recently, I organised and performed in a theatre sketch that was presented to a panel from Investor in Careers - an award that the school then won. Outside school, I enjoy taking part in a variety of sports, and am currently setting up inter-form tournaments to be held in the sixth form. I look forward to the rigours and challenges of an economics degree and would hope to be able to contribute fully to the university community as I believe it would propel my unyielding hunger for education.
use meeeee

That is pretty good. He can't use yours as it would come as flagged on UCAS and that would be cheating. When did you apply and where did you apply? What were you AS grades?

That is pretty good. He can't use yours as it would come as flagged on UCAS and that would be cheating. When did you apply and where did you apply? What were you AS grades?

I attended the foggy school of Winchester College where I set on the path of academic success, after receiving the best GCSEs in the school to date, 7 Cs and 3 Ds - right then I understood that I was something special.