GCSE ENGLISH LANGUAGE Paper 1 Question 5

Either
Your local library is running a creative writing competition. The best entries will be published in a booklet of creative writing.
Write a description of a mysterious place, as suggested by picture.. or Write a story about an event that cannot be explained.
I picked a story about an event that cannot be explained. PLEASEEE GIVE HONEST OPINIONS AND CORRECTIONS ASAP..

“Don’t move,” he whispered …

Friday 18 June 2021 was the day it all begun. Reminiscing on the exhausting day at work she had just conquered, Sarah embarked on her tedious journey home. The overwhelming list of tasks awaiting her once she reached home bombarded her mind. Overfilling with stresses, Sarah made the decision to collect a takeaway (in aim to ease the added stress of cooking). The buzz of the GPS switching on flew through the vehicle as it announced “Starting route to Goole Drive.” Of course, Sarah made nothing of it after all it was probably just a system mishap. Continuing her evening as normal, she deletes the address from the system and thinks absolutely nothing of it.

Time rushes by like a commuter late for work. Following a busy night, Sarah now faces the next day. “Work, Dinner with friends, Home,” Sarah mutters to herself while rushing out of the house for work. The just-risen sun shone softly on the city streets, bringing with it a flurry of early-morning activity. Sarah cruises peacefully through the city streets but becomes reasonably bewildered when soon after, the buzz of the GPS goes off and “Starting route to Goole Drive,” is once again announced. Sarah tries to suppress the uneasiness within her and attempts to convince herself that the thoughts she is facing are simply signs of her continuous overthinking ; however the strong opposing feeling within her gut makes this almost impossible. It’s soon after when she pulls into work that she sees it. She sees it. She sees, a map folded neatly on her passenger seat with a freshly marked circle highlighting the words ‘GOOLE DRIVE.’

As the day passes Sarah struggles to conceal her extreme feeling of discomfort. She is perturbed by her previous findings. Her mind relentlessly tosses between thoughts like violent waves in a storm. The words ‘GOOLE DRIVE’ ricochet as bullets in her mind. The whole day serves as a battle of emotion in Sarah’s mind. She questions herself, “am I being watched?”

“Starting route to Goole Drive.” The clouds crowded together suspiciously overhead as the sky darkened. Sarah drove attentively, eventually she approached towering metal gates that were almost luring her in. She forwarded into the enigmatic field of darkness. After travelling as to what felt to Sarah as hours, the GPS declared “You have reached your final destination.” Cautiously she stepped out of her vehicle, and she was surrounded by what seemed to be gravestones. The grave stones stood soundlessly, row upon row like soldiers long forgotten, a scream shattered the deafening silence. Someone or something was watching. “Don’t move,” he whispered…