Help me if i have done it right ?

Show dont tell English language GCSE
Write 3 paragraphs about a scary experience.
Remember:
•Show, don't tell your feelings and emotions
•Think about the structure
•Choose your words carefully to create the effect you want.

My sister had math exam.
and When
she got home, without another sound she moped across the Kitchen and Plopped down at the table, she yanked
out her folder, oPened it with a sigh, and handed me the note the teacher sent
home.
I thought she’d be excited because she finally completed a math exam correcty
But then I understood
I scanned the note
over and my eyes grew
wide! I slammel the sheet of
Paper down and
charged from the room

A note revealed my sisters academic struggles. We faced challenges together, turning late nights into shared triumphs at the kitchen table. Through setbacks and successes, our bond strengthened into a supportive partnership.

Hi SkalAbalak
I have seen your essay in my opinion although the events are captured in your writing, it focuses more on telling than on showing. Keep in mind that the goal of "show, don't tell" is to pique the reader's interest by explaining events, ideas, and specifics so they may determine the emotions involved on their own.