American Applicant Applying from a School Without Experience with Personal Statements

Have you gone through the PS building tool (linked in my signature below)? When you have, and you are happy with it (as best as you can on your own), then you can get it reviewed by PS helpers on here (confidentially). Don't PM/email your PS to anyone on here - the PS service is organised by the Community Team (employees at TSR)

I didn't use the service but i looked over the guiding questions from the PS building tool to write my personal statement. i am happy with it in the sense that it fulfils every requirement. however, it is too long, and so i am looking for a person familiar with personal statements to pointout what is less relevant or unnecessary in mine, or what i spoke too much about.
I thought the PS helper tool is only for people with more than 100 posts which, sadly, i do not have because i don't have much to say seeing that i live overseas.