Hello, I am a grade B student working towards that A which I will hopefully achieve. My mocks have shown me that Question 1 is my weakest as I do not spend enough time on it and it doesn't seem to effect my grade that much - but it did. It will be very nice for someone to mark this Question 1 for me, I am open to criticisms, just no harsh language and all. Thanks.
Side note: this is from November 2013 paper, Source 1 of course.
In source one the 'sheer joy' is presented as being destroyed by man made structures like buildings. The first two paragraphs describe children's joy as being only indoors and not the adventure of the outside. The writer tells us that in previous generations of children they tend to be more adventurous and outgoing, as the explore the wilderness and seek fun with their peers, however in this generation children tend to be amazed and entertained by the television screens and gadgets that they have indoors.
Furthermore, in the third and forth paragraph the write is informing us about the consequences of not letting children outdoors as Moody tells us it "weaker immune system" if they do not experience the outdoors more and which can inevitably cause issues in later life. Also, Moody tells us the true fact of parents being scared of letting children outdoors, he says "more likely to injure themselves falling out of their bed than a tree", this sentence shows us that the indoors can be more harming to children; with multiple fire hazards, fall damage and electric shocks from all the gadgets and materialism they use.
Later on in the source in paragraph 5, the write, Moody informs us about previous generations spending more time outdoors and the benefits of this as he says "it's amazing" . Moreover in the paragraph he tells us about this generation of children being worried about going into the country side with their friends, evidence of this is when he asked a child and they said "I don't go to the country side...they were almost frightened of the experience".
Lastly, in the last paragraph the writer gives us a conclusion about this generation of children do not go outdoors and the lack of workers with children to help them know the outdoors.
* Spent 15min on this question, more than I usually do.
Thanks again.