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Creative writing improvement

I have my mocks coming up and so I decided to right a paragraph as I need to improve my creative writing. Could anyone give me advice on this?

The amazonian showers incessantly hammered down, relentlessly stabbing me like a thousand needles that contained my everlasting spite. I tried to subdue my emotions from surfacing, but the expectation was farcical. Struggling to supress the bubbling anger that was arising within me, I stopped - allowing the howling wind to engulf me as it shrieked my worst fear. I no longer felt my chest exploding inside me, but my sadness crushing me with an overwhelming force of a tidal wave, and I drowned in its embrace. Although I was trapped in a vicious storm it was sadness that imprisoned me