could someone take a look at my english language paper 1 response?

the question was the question 2 How does the writer use language here to describe the Tyrannosaurus Rex? You could include the writer’s choice of: • words and phrases • language features and techniques and sentence forms.This was my first attempt lol and ik its probably shite but all feedback appreciatedAt the start of the paragraph we see that the t-rex has been presented as having an "oiled,resilient, striding leg". The adjective of "oiled" emphasises that the t-rex is more mechanical than human showing a lack of emotion and therefore a lack of empathy. This presents the t'rex ultimately as terryfying as it would not hesitate to attack and murder the adventurers due to the little empathy and real human emotion it posesses, making the reader also feel afraid of the dinosaur as it is unlike most humans and animals and also show ing a lack of restraint that puts the adventurers in danger. We see more imagery demonstrating the t-rex's lack of emotion through its thighs being presented as "ivory and "steel mesh". The imagery of these adjectives juxtaposes the t-rex (which is evidently alive) suggesting that it is more willing to dabble in evil acts(such as attacking the adventurers) due to its robotic nature ,again presenting the dinosaur as as a terryfying and dangerous creaturem,making the reader feel hatred for the dinosaur.However the dinosaur in the middle of the extract is presented as having "delicate legs dangled out front" The use of the verb "dangled juxtaposes the dehumanisation of the dinosaur earlier in the extract and shows the reader a more human aspect of the dinosaur as it is defenseless and fragile which would garner sympathy from the reader as the adventurers are simply ruthlessly hunting down the t-rex for their own sadistic pleasure.We see more evidence of the dinosaurs human aspect as the extract focuses in on the t-rex's "fence of teeth" The desription of the monsters teeth as a "fence" almost presents the dinosaur as an actual human beinging more sympathy from the reader presenting the dinosaur as much less terrifying making the adventurers look like the actual monsters of the story. The t- rex's "eyes rolled" again demonstrating more humanity as the use of personification again aids the point that the monster is not terrifying and is the victim of the story.