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feedback on my poem?

feedback on my poem?

hey im 15 and english isnt my first language, i think this is pretty good but id like to get better so any constructive criticism is welcome (as well as compliments n analyses ofc :> )

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Butterfly Cemetery

Delicate bones, fragile
Bodies, flight ephemeral in
The desperate flutters
Of transient hope.

Spring’s flowers bloom
For colourful flickers
That flit around clouds and
Flirt with the sun.

Fragments of hues keep
Afloat with each heartbeat
Flail of their wings. Does it not hurt
That they are beautiful?

Tear apart the frail seams,
Rend the fractured wings from
He who yearns only for
The faded sky—is it not so

Easy to defile what is pure?
To ruin with fervour
This futile grace
And all you cannot be?

Feel the
Life under your
Fingertips—it is yours
To set aflame

Or finally set free.

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anyway have a nice day/night!!