Hi again Katka 101.
Before I say anything, have you gone back to your teacher and asked for specifics about where you’re dropping marks? That should always be your first line of action.
Anyway, taking the ‘authority’ title, start by pulling it apart.
‘In Dystopian literature, figures of authority often inspire love and fear.’ How far do you agree?’
For your own sense of clarity, pick out and highlight (literally, with a pen!) the key words. Go on to analyse their meanings and connotations. These key words are those which will give you the substance of your essay. In this case, I’d do something like this :
· Dystopian. A recognised genre of literature, implying the opposite of Utopian. If Utopian is reflective of what’s perceived as ideal, then Dystopian is that which is arguably hell.
· Figures of authority. People/beings perceived as having power over others, usually. How has that authority been gained, or given? Fairly and rightly? Is it exercised with others’ consent? Are those exercising it able to do so through respect? Fear? Are the two mutually exclusive? In other words, can someone command both at the same time?
· Inspire. Usually has positive connotations, and its etymology lies in 'breathing in'. In this quotation, it’s as if the figures of authority are the breath of those they have authority over. Can that kind of control be positive? Can people even enjoy being inferior (to be defined later on) to others? If so, why? If not, why?
· Love. Obvious. But is it two-way? Does it have to be? If it’s not a two-way thing, then what are the consequent results in the one who loves? And in the one who is loved?
· Fear. Also obvious. First reaction is that fear is a one-way thing, but is it? Perhaps those who instil fear in others do so because they themselves are afraid. A standard explanation for bullying; self-protection.
· Love and fear (together). On first reading, not really a natural pairing. Can the two co-exist?
At this stage, you’re probably automatically applying these lines of thinking to the two texts. I hope so.
If you are, get yourself an A3 sheet of paper, and write down the key words as the basis of a mind map/bubble plan. Use coloured pens, highlighters; make it look attractive. Add little images; visual learners will retain valuable information if they can ‘see’ the picture on their planning sheet. You’ll feel like you’ve achieved something, for a start (which you have), but it also organises your thinking so that you can go back later and edit it; add to it - further thoughts, quotations, references etc.
Then, incorporate your version of what I’ve done above. Add evidence, quotations to support your thoughts. After that, you should be able to start tackling what the essay is asking you to do – a classic HFDYA structure.
If this gets you thinking, great. This is Step 1. If you want to aim for Step 2, you could DM me, if you like. But first, have a go at what I’ve been suggesting here, which should help you address the comments your teacher(s) are making.
Needless to say, I hope this helps.