-Content: 12/15
-Range of language:5/12
-Accuracy:2/5
Total:19/32
Hi I marked your answer in the AQA style which focuses on the points above. Overall it was a good attempt at answering the question. You covered both aspects of the question, for the first bulle point it asked you about the importance of exercise for you which you answered towards the end of that paragraph but you could improve that by immediately answering the bulle point at the start of the paragraph as it clearly shows that your paragraph is relevant to the bulle point to the examiner.
For range of language try and use different tenses as this would make you gain more marks.
You scored a little bit low in the accuracy section but that is okay. You used a few the wrong word for some things like “gimnasio” which confused me as I’m not sure whether you are tiring to say gym or gymnastics. You sometimes use “que” when you don’t need it like in “debo que admitir”.
I’ll rewrite your answer so you can have a more accurate example. But we’ll done You are on the right track you are using complex sentences and you are mentioning opinions giving explanations.
En mi opinión los deportes son una pérdida de tiempo! No me consideraría una deportista dado que suelo practico deportes dos veces al mes. Sin embargo, cuando era pequeña, hice gimnasia casi todos los días. Aunque la disfruté y pensé que era pan comido, mis padres dijeron que cuesta un ojo de la cara por lo tanto tuve que dejar de practicarla. Y no he practicado gimnasia desde entonces. Mi papá y yo vamos de pesca todos los sábados porque le encanta pescar al aire libre. Desde mi punto de vista, la pesca es muy aburrida. Si yo tuviera una opinión, nunca volvería a pescar.
En mi tiempo libre me gusta estudiar , porque me gustaría tener un trabajo emocionante e interesante. Sin embargo necesitas notas buenas para ir a la universidad y iré a la universidad si saco notas buenas ya que siempre he soñado de devenir doctora. Anoche, estudié español ya que me gustaría tener la nota más alta de mi clase, pero debo admitir que tengo la memoria de un pez.
Muchas gracias.
Good luck with school.
P.s I’m here if you need anymore help 🙂