Would anyone please mark my answer? It's from Paper 2 and is Question 2.
Question 2: You need to refer to Source A and Source B for this question. Use details from both sources to write a summary of the different ways people are affected by weather. [8 marks]
Answer:
In sources A and B, the writer demonstrates the effects of weather in conversely different ways; in Source A, the writer evokes the harsh, life threatening effects of nature, whereas the writer of Source B simply exemplifies an admiring, awe-stricken attitude towards the "exquisite" snowfall. In Source A, Matt Dickinson, Audrey Sakels, and their team are shown to be tormented by the harsh weather conditions, which have been heightened by the recent "tempest" with "hurricane-force winds". This is sharply juxtaposed with the reverential state of admiration that Arthur Murphy is evoking through his admiration of the "new-fallen snow".
The writer of Source A manipulates the use of similies: "like living in a freezer" and "like a tyre dump fire", highlighting the calamitous effects of nature. The turbulent participles "ripping", "engulfing" and "demolishing" further reinforce the extremities of the "tempest", as if destructs it's surroundings "effortlessly", lacking sympathy for the destruction caused. Thus, to further inflict these extremities, the writer refers to the omniscient and omnipotent beings, "Shiva" - the god of "destruction" and "Nemesis" -\
the god of "retribution", which the storm has greatly surpasses. In the "Death Zone", the "tempest" had caused over thirty climbers to be "fighting for their lives", and "three Indian climbers" alongside five climbers on the "south" to have been snatched away their lives.
The harsh, destructive force of weather is evidently contrasted in Source B, as the first-person narrative exemplifies the "exquisite" snowfall.
I couldn't finish cause I had to move on to the rest of the questions - what mark would I approximately get and what can I do to
improve?