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Not sure what I lost marks on

Hey,

I just completed an essay on Dr Jekyll and Mr Hyde, and I am not sure what I lost my marks on as I got 23/30 (AQA btw), if anyone has any constructive feedback, it would help me immensely as my mocks are in a few weeks!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1pUYymHZt41cQauL2Re_sw48ii5ETkI8bhgDXj-S6nNI/edit?usp=sharing

Thanks!

Jian
Original post by JianGuan
Hey,

I just completed an essay on Dr Jekyll and Mr Hyde, and I am not sure what I lost my marks on as I got 23/30 (AQA btw), if anyone has any constructive feedback, it would help me immensely as my mocks are in a few weeks!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1pUYymHZt41cQauL2Re_sw48ii5ETkI8bhgDXj-S6nNI/edit?usp=sharing

Thanks!

Jian

Isn't it the role of your teacher to point out where/why you lost marks, and to suggest areas for improvement?
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Original post by DataVenia
Isn't it the role of your teacher to point out where/why you lost marks, and to suggest areas for improvement?


very little feedback
Original post by JianGuan
Hey,
I just completed an essay on Dr Jekyll and Mr Hyde, and I am not sure what I lost my marks on as I got 23/30 (AQA btw), if anyone has any constructive feedback, it would help me immensely as my mocks are in a few weeks!
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1pUYymHZt41cQauL2Re_sw48ii5ETkI8bhgDXj-S6nNI/edit?usp=sharing
Thanks!
Jian

jian the AO1 intro is weak bro icl- 'major factor contributing to Jekyll's demise' come on bro u can do better than that. You don't really identify any literary devices, you just say 'the word temptation'- NO- identify it.
You embed quotes well but there isn't enough analysis, its all a bit surface level, when you say about how Lanyon accuses Jekyll of being 'wrong, wrong in mind', talk about how- does that make Lanyon exclusively right' in mind', a moral arbiter of scientific orthodoxy?
i know u have got 9s before bro this is a poor from u
also drake is washed my boy
Kingsley

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