A 16 marker essay plan for the effects of institutionalisation requires:
(you can use this structure for most 16 mark 'discuss/outline & evaluate' questions)-
6 AO1 knowledge marks:
>definition of institutionalisation
>the effects of institutionalisation
>context of the Romanian orphans
>>why were there so many in orphanages? Due to Nicolae Ceausescu's requirement for women to have more than 5 children, however many couldn't afford to raise them, so they sent them to orphanages).
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10 AO3 research & evaluation marks:
Research: >Rutter's ERA study (2011) - aims, procedure, findings and conclusion,
>optional but you can include The Bucharest Early Intervention project by Zeanah et al. (2005) - aims, procedure, findings and conclusion.
Evaluation: requires 3 lengthy, detailed evaluations OR 5 quick, to the point evaluations.
>real life application (strength)
>romanian orphanages were not typical (weakness)
>children not randomly assigned (weakness)
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Feedback: You have good AO3: supporting research and evaluation, however you lack AO1: knowledge of concepts and theories. I would estimate a 10/16 for you, which is still pretty damn high. Just make sure to define institutionalisation, give the effects and if you want some juicy Romanian history, before you introduce Rutter's study, which will definitely land you a 16/16.
Hope my feedback has helped anyone struggling!