I want to apply for a work placement, shadowing a GP, at my local medical center. Please can you have a look at the letter below and suggest any improvements.
All comments appreciated, thank you.
My Address
Recipients Address
Dear Janet Gallant (Practice Manager)
RE: Shadowing a GP My name is Ali Ghasemi: I am 16 years old, currently studying my A-levels at Notre Dame Sixth Form College. I am writing to enquire about a possibility of a work placement at Ashton View Medical Centre from week beginning 4/07/11 until week beginning 15/07/11. I am studying Biology, Chemistry, ICT and Maths. Having intensely enjoyed these subjects at GCSE, I have chosen to continue with these at A-level as I believe that these will form a stable foundation for my ultimate career as a doctor. Having completed a 2 week work experience at a pharmacy, I learned the importance of good communication skills and teamwork and I hope by completing work experience at Ashton View Medical Centre, I can further deepen my interest in the career that I want to pursue. Ashton View Medical Centre has been my local medical centre for the past 3 years and the friendly faces have become known to me and I cannot imagine any other place to complete my work experience. I am a punctual, hard-working and open-minded individual. I am a person who is kind and caring towards others and have a genuine passion for helping others. My hobbies are; I play badminton at my local leisure centre, I like to read, I play football with my siblings at my local park and I find the game more enjoyable when I sort the players into teams. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
I'll be writing some of these soon as I want to do some work experience for medicine as well xD Maybe instead of saying "for my ultimate career as a doctor" say "for my ultimate career goal, to become a doctor"? Just an idea... it sounded a bit weird when I read it but that could just be me!