EXAMPLE PARAGRAPH FOR ENGLISH LANG: PAPER 1 Q3 (STRUCTURE) Throughout the whole extract, the writer cleverly crafts the story, constantly shifting focus from Pi to the ship as a whole as a way to increase the tension and add heightened emergency to the situation.
At the beginning, Martel introduces Pi the main character, who is observing the “water” in the “darkness.” Immediately, the reader is thrown into a very dangerous and life threatening situation, adding to the alarmed and fearful tone. In fact, Martel cleverly uses short sentences in this paragraph to add a sense of pace and urgency, while also having Pi stay stationary, creating a very uneasy and dangerous atmosphere.
The reader is able to ascertain the urgency of Pi’s situation as the writer adds movement in the following paragraphs, as Pi “ran up the stairs”, hooking the reader, almost causing the reader to join Pi as he is running for his life. The fact that there is an increased repetition of questions as he is looking for the “officers and crew” as the extract develops conveys how Pi starting to doubt the safety and security of the situation, leading to the climax as he finds the crew.
However, as the tension peaks, the writer uses cyclical structure by finally having Pi find the officers that were constantly referred to at the start of the extract and as the extract develops. The readers are immediately alarmed as the men “interrupted Pi” dismantling the previous assumption that the officers were calm and collected, and were ready to help Pi. At the end, the tension is released and perhaps even converted to confusion as the officers threw Pi “overboard”, once again undermining the viewpoint that these men were there to help Pi.