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Will my crush like this poem I wrote for her? (Be honest please) :)

I remember last year, for exam period there was no football games. So the mens and the womens team for my college had to train together. One guy on our mens team fell for this girl and wrote her a poem.

She said no.

The girls thought it was 'cute and silly'.

We all gave him alot of banter.
Some guys took it to far and he quit the team.

Reply 21

username155270

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Original post by Anonymous

This took me several weeks to write so please tell me what you think:

Now, I can’t live without you
What’s my life without you
If I part with you
Then I will part with myself too
Because you are the one
You are my life
My peace and my pain
Now, only you are my love
Our relationship is such thatI can’t stand even a moment away from you
Everyday I am living for you
All my time is given to you
None of my moment is complete without you
Every breath bears your name
Because you are the one
You are my life
Now, only you are my loveI have lived only for you
That I gave myself to you
Being loyal to you kept me on track
Removed all the pain from heart
Now, my life is only with you
Oh my love, I feel complete after I got you
Because you are the one
Now you are the one

Very sweet gesture, no one really does this anymore. What a lucky girl.

I think you should remove somethings though in your poem. You are my life I can't live without you is a bit much lol.

Maybe keep it short and sweet...

I had a guy pass me a note that said " beautiful, I just want you to know you're my favourite girl"... Although it's from a famous song I thought it was so random and cute.

(edited 8 years ago)

Reply 22

whorace

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Please do not do this, NO NO NO

Reply 23

Shumaya

14

I'd die a little but on the inside if my boyfriend sent me this poem, let alone someone that I'm not even involved with yet.

(edited 8 years ago)

Reply 24

Maid Marian

20

It reads like a song :s-smilie:

As a master of writing poems, I'm sorry but it's just not very good. It's too intense.

Reply 25

Kittyboy

16

better than busta rhymes

Reply 26

Alexion

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Original post by Profesh

You're fooling no-one, 'anonymous':

omfg

Reply 27

monk1324

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Original post by Alexion

*cringe*

Was going to post this exact comment.

Reply 28

whorace

2

Rainy days and long nights
Of tender solace and midnight walks
Green pastures and bright ideals
It took exactly thirty seconds to make you squeal

Reply 29

Amellia123

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Original post by BioStudentx

I'd rather get AIDS than read that again.

I'm sorry, I laughed way too hard at that :biggrin:

Reply 30

AsandaLFC

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Original post by Anonymous

This took me several weeks to write so please tell me what you think:

Now, I can’t live without you
What’s my life without you
You are my life
Everyday I am living for you
You are my life

Jesus jesus jesus christ! Shes going to run for her life after hearing this

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Reply 31

username155270

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Original post by Mayhem™

I don't need no poem to pull :sexface:

What do you do big shot

Reply 32

The_Internet

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Original post by xobeauty

Very sweet gesture, no one really does this anymore. What a lucky girl.

I think you should remove somethings though in your poem. You are my life I can't live without you is a bit much lol.

Maybe keep it short and sweet...

I had a guy pass me a note that said " beautiful, I just want you to know you're my favourite girl"... Although it's from a famous song I thought it was so random and cute.